Friday, June 1, 2007

Sisters

Laura's armor
falls
broils and cuts

Claire's ear
sells donuts in
special
crab oils

Nell's pets'
beaks
deal baubles that
wrench:

Ten beeps then mute.

Julie's tremors
smell
dots with rust

spots blear
glassed then
unlike
tinfoil

Nell gets
weeks
in her own
stench:

"Dial ten," says flute.

2 comments:

Baby Bear said...

that's really cool - especially after seeing the original poem. i like this translation poem idea, it leads to some crazy images!

00 Ghost said...

I really love some of the imagery in this poem. There are several stark visual images that are handled quite economically. I am also intrigued by the relationships among the stanzas as sisters. Upon further analysis, I may have something more useful to post.